No, no, no...your comments are good and useful. It does nothing but help.
I don't think I'll go too much into their "relationship", as what you read was pretty much the extent of it. I don't want this to be a character-driven piece, all nice-nice about their lives. I want it to be more on-the-surface, symbolic than that. I think I might "disturb" it up a bit.
What I had hoped to convey is random. They haven't interacted until he was contacted to do the tattoo work.
I like there to be a silent connection, but no real interaction (as it's hard for someone in her position to interact anyway). I brought up the high school thing because I just needed a way to connect them, but not a solid connection, something in the past, something fleeting. It wasn't pre-meditated though, it just came out like that.
Thank you...I have some things to think about now. :
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Date: 2002-04-23 01:42 pm (UTC)I don't think I'll go too much into their "relationship", as what you read was pretty much the extent of it. I don't want this to be a character-driven piece, all nice-nice about their lives. I want it to be more on-the-surface, symbolic than that. I think I might "disturb" it up a bit.
What I had hoped to convey is random. They haven't interacted until he was contacted to do the tattoo work.
I like there to be a silent connection, but no real interaction (as it's hard for someone in her position to interact anyway). I brought up the high school thing because I just needed a way to connect them, but not a solid connection, something in the past, something fleeting. It wasn't pre-meditated though, it just came out like that.
Thank you...I have some things to think about now. :